Focus group feedback and what we will improve on

FOCUS GROUP FEEDBACK 

what are the strengths of our short film?

Afsarah: It felt really authentic

Areeba: I like script 

Zayna: The storyline was good 

What were the weaknesses of our short film? 

Afsarah: It was hard to understand the plot because it was not edited so it was hard to differentiate what the actual plot was. 

How would you edit this short film? 

Afsarah: I would cut out the bits I don't want and make an actual sequence. 

What type of music would you add to this type of film? 

Afsarah: Maybe some soft instrumental music for some scenes such as the picnic scene

What would you change about this?

Afsarah: There is too much focus on the food now. And to make it feel more dream like I would add something out of the ordinary to make the audience question why it is the way it is, then at the end the audience will get their answer and recognise that it was all just a part of Selima's hallucinations. 

WHAT WE WILL IMPROVE ON 

We will use their feedback to add to our short film. We will keep our short film feeling authentic and not change the script and storyline too much. We will edit it to make the concept of the film easier to understand and to make it feel more dreamlike such as adding warp effects on some clips and having a flashback in the beginning of the film. Adding a flashback also makes the audience question what the film is about and why what is shown on screen is happening and for what making it easier for the viewer to understand the plot. We will take advice from Afsarah especially as she has some very good points. Such as creating a good sequence by adding soft music in specific scenes to make the clip more scenic, improving on the film. We will make the food scenes shorter to focus more on the storyline.